Run-through Notes 4/20 (Kathi)

Run-through Notes
4/20/2010 (7th run)

1-3: The Wall of Oliver’s life…Quiet Green Edges…Oliver is very young.
- E: be completely ready for blackout. When it goes dark, you have to be ready to go onstage.
- SOUND: can the voices arguing be slightly lower?
- E/LIGHTS: what are we doing about Oliver’s shadow?
- E: take a moment longer before waking up, revel in the quiet, then your parents start fighting again.
- E: if you can’t get your clothing on, just stay in character, struggle in character.
- K: good choice to go to say something to Oliver and stop.
4: Oheygoodmorning.
- SET/PROPS: can we get more stuff under YL’s bed?
- E: you stopped smelling yourself.
- E: good start to your monologue. Good monologue overall.
- S: cheat out more when in your room on the door-side of the room.
- S: “with blueberries” – make more 13.
- S/BEN CUE: as soon as you get offstage, start walking up the beach, slowly. Oliver will join you.
5: You’ve made my life like water.
- E&S: more noise during tussel.
- S: after E says “sorry”, make your upset-ness more obvious when you sit up.
6: The Golem.
- S: great “tidying up” during transition.
- LIGHTS: lamp will be on, turned off, S needs to go up with cue.
- S: before you leave to get the pillow cushions, have a reason to leave (you just leave, it kind of looks weird.
- E&S: kiss moment might feel weird, but it looks fine.
7: Mother Laundry.
- BEN CUE: can mother laundry and photobooth light be two separate cues?
- S: Pick chair up off the floor. It is really loud.
- E&S: person who is near the fringe of the beach should sit forward in seat.
- E&S: did you leave stage in character? Please do. All transitions should be in character.
8: Like Your Golem
- SOUND: can the sound for the beach scenes be lowered?
- E: move down the beach.
- S: if you can, hold the shell up, or something else to draw attention to the shell.
- E: even bigger as the golem.
- E: move down the beach.
9: Oliver and his Mother. Photostrip.
- S: good whistling and playing with the shell.
- K: good coming on with the folded shirt. I liked it.
- WORK: make YL’s transition more dynamic.
10: Everything was Electric.
- Lamp is blocking Sam’s face completely.
- E&S: nice waking up, again.
11: YL is drawing. Oliver’s sleeping.
- good timing throughout this scene, but the ending could be sped up. It runs a little long.
- E&S: you are in and out of your shoes a lot, don’t worry about tying them when you are older.
- E&S: nice doors closing simultaneously.
12: A Boat
- S: bread products? Ketchup.
- S: take a little more time between “its for you” and “I think we should get a boat.”
- S: great energy in the storm.
- E: much louder.
- E: move down the beach.
- WORK: golem outline.
- SOUND: levels in this scene were good.
- S: get up a little slower, move slower, as if you are thinking. Move back cautiously.
- E: hold anger through “but nothing happened.”
- E&S: nice moment looking at the golem in the sand, but I wish there were a golem in the sand.
13: Oliver, his mother, and the Golem…
- E: louder, but good pacing. You are looking a little static sitting on the bed – what are little things we can do to change this (think about the behavior/Djola thing).
- E: good book tactic with the paper falling out.
- E: you have a really nice moment after tacking the picture to the wall with your picture and your shadow. I liked it.
14: Being a golem is easy.
- K: nice choice with the shells.
- SOUND: too loud in this scene.
- K: the glasses are nice.
15: YL by himself. Pillage.
- E: don’t forget to look at your walls.
- S: I liked that you couldn’t fall asleep.
- K: look around more on the second “oliver”.
- E: take another beat after “I think she stopped putting stuff in”: It felt rushed.
16: Is Ollie Here.
- K: NICE CHANGE.
- K: I watched you go over the bar to get into O’s room and it wasn’t that noticeably awkward.
- SOUND: beach interlude was nice.
- K: really nice monologue.
- S: nice work with hat on “pulled taut, tight”
- S: your hair was poking through your hat and you looked like ace ventura.
- S: don’t forget eye contact moment with Paula.
- K: nice moment with lamp. HAHA.
17: We don’t act like people (2).
- K: nice playing with doorknob. HAHA.
- S: when door is open, move back (I know you did this, but anticipate).
- S: quiet feet.
- K: take a moment and make eye contact with E before leaving and slamming the door.
- WORK SCENE TOMORROW (ethan needs to be more angry).
18: The Ocean filled up with something else.
- E&S: nice face-off moment.
- E&S: I like that you put your shoes together.
- E: move down beach.
- E&S: good pulling Oliver down and scooting closer to him. Don’t retreat, though.
- SOUND: too loud.
- S: “you don’t have to” – don’t throw it away.
- E: your monologue is good, but you have to be louder.
- E: we lost you “look”
19: Imagine a cross-section of your world
- E: leave shirt in room on floor so you can add it to your pile.
- S: good breathing.
- E: get in shower earlier.
- E: where is your Oliver body while in the shower? If you are going to lose it when the voices stop, make sure it’s a really pronounced change.
- E: good breathing, even more.
- S: you putting on your hat was heartbreaking for some reason.
- LIGHT: need light on S when he’s at top of boardwalk.
- E: nice taking your time in your room with your walls.
- E: make noises while pulling things down.
- E: good pulling things down, even more hurried.
- E: remember everything on the floor of your room can be added to your island-pile.
- E: breathing? Can we cue this (3 breaths in then lights out).
- WORK: last scene.

General:
- there are still too many pauses and dead spaces – find places where they aren’t necessary and get rid of them.
- E: don’t take off your clothing so that the sleeves are inside out – you have to put a lot of things back on and then you have to deal with them.